Place And Time Response

For the in-class Personal Narrative workshop, I first looked at Savannah's paper. Personally I really enjoyed her paper and thought it was really structured well and organized. My favorite part is when she talks about her first year at FSU with her and all her friends meeting up again at Whataburger. The only feedback I could really give is to maybe add another memory from high school, since she when from her Freshman year memory to her senior year memory with no memories in between. The other narrative I reviewed was Jamie's. Jamie did a really good job of describing her friends and the car, and I really liked how she provided brief but detailed descriptions of her friends, which allowed me to know what the looked like without getting too word heavy with the descriptions. I would recommend that she takes some time in her paper to describe the location she's at for this specific story, as well as why she and her friends are out there. Other than that once she adds that and a title I think she'll have a very strong paper.